tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5888438300076664400.post2718072859103378396..comments2014-12-09T17:25:07.561-08:00Comments on Words and Images: Family and StorytellerAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5888438300076664400.post-25726976898175272772014-09-18T17:50:27.829-07:002014-09-18T17:50:27.829-07:00Some of the details that you touched upon re: the ...Some of the details that you touched upon re: the image are interesting. I thought your reading of what the pottery jars might mean, for instance, is a bit of a stretch, but that's not always a bad thing - this one seems like an interesting stretch. So you do well with the image itself.<br /><br />There are a number of issues with your analysis of the poem, though. Why do you see it as being about familiar love, for instance? It's not a crazy implication to make (there are several mentions of "home", so presumably there might be a family there), but rather than working through why we might think that, under the surface, this is a poem about familial love, you basically just assume that it is. Similarly, you make the leap into assuming that the heart symbolizes familial love - why is that? Even in the "mainstream" American culture hearts are, if anything, more habitually used to evoke romantic love than familial love. That doesn't mean that your claim is absurd - just, again, that you're not really working through the details, but rather making assumptions.<br /><br />Most problematically, you never really say anything articulate about details of the poem & details of the text together - why focus on the pottery in the image if you don't have anything to say about what it means in the text, for instance? Ultimately this reads like an analysis of an image (a reasonably good one) plus an analysis of a poem (a less good one) without much glue to tie them together.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5888438300076664400.post-43530573904926463822014-09-16T08:15:29.605-07:002014-09-16T08:15:29.605-07:00I really enjoyed reading your essay! The overall t...I really enjoyed reading your essay! The overall theme of family love is an obvious one, but I think you did a great job of using specific examples and bringing in your own insight. <br />One thing I would suggest is to expand upon the role of females. This may be because we spoke about feminism and this poem in class, but I think that you start off with some substantial arguments about it and then sidetrack it for family love. For example, in the second paragraph you talk about the girls in the image carrying pottery jars. Then, you go on to explain Kochininako breaking the traditional Laguna culture by hunting. I think there is room to expand upon these details. You have great ideas dealing with family love, so I would be interested to hear your further thoughts on the role of feminism. We mentioned familial feminism in class, so that is one avenue you could take. I believe you could provide a solid argument for both sides to interweave them into one long essay. Maybe expand upon how the strong role of females allows the bond of the family to be stronger. Overall, I think you did a great job of interpreting the poem and the image.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5888438300076664400.post-12209904816788106482014-09-16T08:07:57.734-07:002014-09-16T08:07:57.734-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com