tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5888438300076664400.post7357460765956702563..comments2014-12-09T17:25:07.561-08:00Comments on Words and Images: Expected Rejection Doesn't Hurt Any LessAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5888438300076664400.post-35648991736026285082011-09-25T17:28:44.930-07:002011-09-25T17:28:44.930-07:00This is very good material, and I was interested a...This is very good material, and I was interested and engaged through the whole thing. I could go through and explain *why* I liked each part, but a couple example will suffice. Your attention both to the role of perspective here and to Felix's facial expression show excellent attention to detail - relevant details. You are also engaged thoroughly with the weird absence of the older De Lacey himself, which I found very insightful.<br /><br />As Anthony tries to indicate, though, I think that your focus is imperfect. You start out with the idea of "superiority" and end on "rejection." Both are big, complicated ideas in what is ultimately a narrowly focused essay on a particular moment in the text, which are not really defined.<br /><br />What do I mean? I mean, for instance, that your analysis of perspective and superiority is fantastic - and yet we know that the monster is superior in many conventional ways. It may be, as you imply, Felix's cruelty that makes him "superior" - so is this a down-is-up argument in which you're arguing that the monster is inferior/inhuman precisely because he lacks the humanity/cruelty/casting-outsiders-out-drive of Felix?<br /><br />I hope that made some kind of sense. Basically I'm arguing that a more focused argument is beginning to emerge here, which is more directly rooted in the ideas of superiority, rejection, and especially perspective you bring up. How can you bring it all together?<br /><br />Also, what do you make of the way the two women are portrayed in the picture?Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5888438300076664400.post-32928482116416254152011-09-24T21:37:21.243-07:002011-09-24T21:37:21.243-07:00I really like your detailed description and interp...I really like your detailed description and interpretation of Ward's image depicting the exchange between the monster and the De Laceys. I feel like this is the start of a really good paper, especially the parts where you interpret WHY Ward made the artistic choices that he did (example where you explain why he chose to show us a view looking up and also why didn't include De Lacey in the image). <br /><br />My suggestions for improving your article are as follows. First remember that an essay is an argument, which means you need to identify a question and state a clear position which you will defend. All the interpretive work you have done will act as support of your argument, but right now you don't have a thesis to support. <br /><br />A great next step would be to try to decide what Ward wants us to feel/think from seeing this image, then decide what argument he is making. Once you decide what YOU think he is really saying, use all your descriptive evidence to support your theory.Anthony Garucciohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04560868462000803679noreply@blogger.com